Thursday, 15 August 2013

Pencil ( Verse First - challenge)

Feel the velvet firmness
O dark, grainy, sensual nib
Thoughts flow out of you
Deeply honeyed ribbons of hope
Pressing spiritually against the page
So smooth yet lovingly lined anticipation
Vellum whispers of desires untold
Softly accepting rivers of offerings
Ah, to be marked by you
o sexy sexy Pencil 8B

-Anne V

Poet United's writing challenge: Verse First ~ Edit to Elevate
Writing about a pencil! This is an old poem that I thought would fit this challenge, so i edited it to elevate the verse to something artistic and desirable. Hope it is not too shabby a piece and that I got it right.

11 comments:

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love the "deeply honeyed ribbons of hope"...the last line made me really smile!

Anne Viva (Anne The Obscure) said...

Thanks Sherry for visiting and commenting. :) I loved your work too. :)

Paul Andrew Russell said...

It's amazing how something as mundane as the pencil can be brought so alive by words. Lovely writing. :-)

Laurie Kolp said...

I've never thought of a pencil as spiritually pressing the paper before.

Loredana Donovan said...

I love your take on the prompt! A pencil is a great tool for a poet, the messenger of hope. Some wonderful lines here, so creative :)

Anne Viva (Anne The Obscure) said...

Wow everyone thanks for the feedback and comments :)

Paul: thank you for thinking so. I followed your idea of the kitchen table and first wrote about a door in my house, then thought of editing to elevate this old poem of mine to fit the challenge. Glad you liked it. :)

Laurie: Yes the stationery nut in me came through loud and clear, didn't it... :)

Loredana: The right sort of grainy paper and a perfect pen or pencil can always trigger inspiration for me. Thanks so much for visiting me here and for the kind comments. :)

moondustwriter said...

I love sexy pencils...
very nicely worded

kelvin s.m. said...

...i am a lover of pencils...and you have made it even more lovely in my eyes... great write....loved it... smiles...

Anne Viva (Anne The Obscure) said...

L. Moon: Thanks for visiting me and for the kind words.

Kelvin: I really appreciate your visit. Glad you liked it.

Sexy pencils make the world go around where poetry is concerned...:)

Akila G said...

Loved the intimacy

The Pensive One said...

So smooth yet lovingly lined anticipation
Vellum whispers of desires untold

I like how sensually this poem develops. Something so simple. :)

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